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[Poem] The Possibilities


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I've been writing some poems lately and have been bugging many friends with them already. I was debating if I should put this up here and someone pushed me to do so (thanks Sym). So here it is:

 

 

 

The possibilities

 

You are the most special by far

Even if now normal is what you are

Nothing out of the ordinary

Holding potential to be extraordinary

 

Stepping into broad daylight

As the sun is shining bright

When using your calm mind

Your inner strength is easy to find

 

Feeling the water is what you crave

You can tame the highest wave

It is the depths of the sea

Where you would love to be

 

To many you are frightening

Controlling thunder and lightning

It is your exceptional speed

In which you most exceed

 

In your heart lives a blazing fire

Which not many can admire

But you will prove them wrong

As you are immensely strong

 

Hiding in the shade of the trees

Hearing the rustling of the leafs

Protecting nature from any harm

That is your greatest charm

 

Thriving in the most icy place

You are pure and simple grace

The intense and freezing cold

Is the power that you hold

 

With ribbons dancing in the air

You easily show your flair

Your looks tend to be deceiving

As even dragons will be fleeing

 

When the moon takes its place

Your defenses start to raise

It is hard to pass you by

When there’s darkness in the sky

 

You are the most special by far

Even if now normal is what you are

Nothing out of the ordinary

Holding  potential to be extraordinary 

 

 

- AlateaOlwyn, 01/10/2014

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It's a good start. I'd advice you not to chain yourself to rhyme and let your words free. Sometimes the poem feels forced, try playing with rhytms and using a combination of different rhymes. It'll bring more of a story and structure to your poems. Good luck C:

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It's a good start. I'd advice you not to chain yourself to rhyme and let your words free.


I don't like to write free verse. To me it feels like writing in general, which is something I truely hate and I always struggle to get what's going on in my mind to appear on paper. For some weird reason the rhymes are what enables me to let things out, even though this one was just for fun :) Thanks for your comment though ^-^



I do wonder now if someone will mention what the poem is about ^^
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