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TO WRITE A ROSE

 

A rose is only but a flower

 

So why is it given such credibility?

 

It does not hold with it serenity and power

 

 

So why do we strive

 

To write a rose

 

When we should write to be alive?

 

Why do we seek the simple, the fleeting

 

This is the point I keep repeating.

 

 

Why do we strive for normality,

 

When changing subjects in the middle of a poem

 

is a much more interesting reality?

 

Why must we rhyme?

 

Is it just because

 

We are told?

 

 

Or is it because the art that we bring

 

Is only the illusion

 

to which we cling?

 

 

Is it because we fear creativity?

 

Is it because we cannot live outside

 

of the proverbial box?

 

 

Is it that we truly fear

 

our most powerful gift?

 

Must everyone disregard their humanity

 

to float along, to drift?

 

 

What, you might ask,

 

what is it?

 

Well, it was given to you and to me,

 

so make better shit.

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I'm getting some serious writing envy here, man; you start writing good short stories too and Imma be super jelly.

 

Reading it out loud, I noticed some awkwardness in the rhythm, which is probably a casualty of doing it up all fawn-cay to look like a rose. This part was pretty damn clever, though:

 

"Why do we strive for normality,
When changing subjects in the middle of a poem
is a much more interesting reality?
Why must we rhyme?
Is it just because
We are told?"

 

I like how it sets up a rhyme, questions why it's doing so, and then ends on this little, anticlimactic "no." That's the kinda shit you see in texbooks next to pictures of oddly effeminate Italian men. Nice. The ending kinda ruins the whole fawn-cay aesthetic, but still, nice.

 

[spoiler]P.S. have you thought about colouring the text to make it more obvious? That'd look pretty rad.[/spoiler]

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Reading it out loud, I noticed some awkwardness in the rhythm, which is probably a casualty of doing it up all fawn-cay to look like a rose

Yeah...that was definitely on purpose...totally meant to do that....

 

The reason some of the rhymes don't line up very well is because the poem is written (at least it was supposed to be) like a song with no chorus.  The words speed up and slow down as the peom needs them to.

 

Aaaaaaand, it's a poem about creativity (obviously). So naturally it's gonna be kind of strange :)

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